delta.com 델타항공: semantically broken 23

source: https://www.delta.com/content/www/en_US/traveling-with-us/where-we-fly/destinations/north-america/atlanta.html
target: https://ko.delta.com/content/www/en_US/traveling-with-us/where-we-fly/destinations/north-america/atlanta.html

Atlanta retains its old southern charm, winding the threads of the past into its thoroughly-modern approach to art, sports, culture and cuisine.
오래된 남부의 매력을 간직하고 있는 애틀랜타는 과거로부터 어어지는 끈을 미술, 스포츠, 문화, 음식에 대한 현대적인 접근으로 연결시키고 있습니다.
->’threads of the past into’ reads a dictionary meaning so it sounds awkward in context.

The vanguard of the New South, Atlanta combines down-home charm and refined elegance with a fresh breeze of the modern. Packed with peach trees and people that are just as sweet, it’s been a force in the civil rights movement as well a host city for the Olympics.
새롭게 남부에서 앞서가는 애틀랜타는 남부 특유의 순수한 매력과 정제된 우아함이 신선하고 현대적인 바람과 조화를 이루는 곳입니다. 달콤한 복숭아 나무와 친철한 사람들로 가득한 곳… 애틀랜타는 시민 운동의 핵심 세력이었으며 올림픽 개최지였습니다.
->’a fresh breeze of the modern’ reads ‘modern breeze’ so it doesn’t make sense at all. If the term is used as a metaphor, it would be worse. The subject ‘Atlanta’ cannot get along with the verb ‘been a force.’ The adjective ‘sweet’ is not proofread properly.

Atlanta sits on the Chattahoochee River and is defined by gently rolling hills, forest, and to the east, Stone Mountain, an impressive dome of quartz monzonite that is the largest exposed piece of granite in the world.
동쪽의 스톤 마운틴에는 세계에서 가장 큰 노출 화강암인 석영 몬조니암으로 된 인상적인 돔을 볼 수 있습니다.
->The verb doesn’t agree to the subject.

Atlanta’s reputation as the very definition of the South has made it a character in classic films like Gone With the Wind and Driving Miss Daisy. Don’t miss the Margaret Mitchell House & Museum, the Tudor Revival mansion where the novel Gone With the Wind was written.
만일 대중 문화를 좋아하신다면, 월드 오브 코카콜라를 방문하셔서 지구상에서 가장 유명한 탄산음료 브랜드에 대한 모든 것을 알아보시거나, CNN 센터와 스튜디오 투어에서 미국 최고의 뉴스센터에서 벌어지는 카메라 뒤의 이야기들을 경험해 보세요.
-> The tone of the two main verbs is not consistent.

Atlanta’s reputation as the very definition of the South has made it a character in classic films like Gone With the Wind and Driving Miss Daisy. Don’t miss the Margaret Mitchell House & Museum, the Tudor Revival mansion where the novel Gone With the Wind was written.
남부의 대표 도시로서의 애틀랜타의 이미지는 바람과 함께 사라지다와 드라이빙 미스 데이지와 같은 클래식 영화에서 비롯되었습니다. 튜더 리바이벌 양식의 저택이고 소설 바람과 함께 사라지다가 쓰여진 장소인 마가렛 미첼 하우스 박물관도 반드시 방문하십시오.
->The first sentence delivers a reversed meaning since the structure follows English grammar. The verb ‘don’t miss’ doesn’t read a proper tone as a suggestion/recommendation.

Overall Rating: 6/10 (May 30, 2013)

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