Apple 애플 02 image

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“for everyone on your list” is nicely rephrased with “for those who I would like to thank and show my love”
However, “전하다(show/deliver)” is unnecessarily repeated and makes the flowing unnatural.
The second sentence tone doesn’t get along with the preceding sentence due to the verb tone transition. 무료로 배송해 드립니다 would be more natural in this case.

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